does this make sense? do i need more clarity within this paragraph?

“i want to explore why we as individuals feel pressured to give our immediate attention to our technologies. i’m going to do this by doing an in depth analysis of three different technologies: Facebook, an email application called Mailbox, and Pinterest. i will examine the types of behaviors these technologies encourage through the lens of an everyday user…”

I’m not sure what I want to offer from this analysis. does anyone have any suggestions?

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